Wordsmith Fiction Week 4 : Season 24 - "The Family Secret"
Hello friends and welcome to my article in the SLC S24/W4 I would be sharing my thoughts immediately.
Julie couldn't as much as finish her meal, she was disoriented and at the same time confused. "Who in the gracious world is Jeremy" she questioned the walls cluelessly. She had alot in her plate. It was about the will! Lots if thoughts flashed her mind at once. Lost In her deep thoughts the plate of pudding, fell of the table and gave out a resounding echo in the mighty castle.
Jason her brother quickly ran in almost immediately to see his sister in tears on the floor. " Why would he do this to us, hiding my brother from me" she said amidst sob and tears. Jason replied immediately. "I promise we would all figure it out and this in no time". She couldn't hold her emotions again. The maid came in at once to save the day, cleaning her up and saying reassuring words to her again. Julie looked Jason in the eye one more time and asked "Who is Jeremy?"
Moreso, Jason was infuriated immediately, he started pacing the room as he left the scene, he wanted answers to his sister and save her from fading away, he thought seamlessly as he paced the room. An idea dropped almost immediately as he walked straight to his father's study room in search for clues and answers to the questions immediately.
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Scanning the place with full interest and precision, he tried so much to find out answers to the question. He traced the bricks and searched the books but his attention was caught by an inscription on one of the bricks on the wall. He tried pulling out the brick and opened, inside it was a beautiful old dusty picture of a man and a little boy, behind the picture was boldly written. My Beloved Jeremy. This was all he wanted. He came back to his sister who was already fast asleep. He woke her and handed it over to her.
Almost immediately, their mum Helen walked into the room to the awkward, tense and demanding kids. The asked the question almost immediately to her "Who is Jeremy?" She was so shocked and couldn't as much as look them in the face. She sat down so quietly and told them everything from the beginning. The picture was shown to her immediately as she was so shocked to see this. "How did you get these?" she asked the kids. Nobody was answering her and she decided to tell them.
Furthermore, she explained how she sought kids after marrying their father for about 6 years. She said she couldn't help it but asked their father to sleep with the maid back then. After successful attempt a son was conceived. A beautiful boy who was so find of their father. This was a dream come true to him. He showered love and care on the boy until she after about 4 years when she conceived and bore the twins. It was time to discard the maid and the child, so she talked her husband into doing so.
After successful persuasion the maid and Jeremy was sent packing dead in the night during a thunderstorm, she yelled at the maid with the husband supporting her, the maid was forced to leave that night with nowhere to go. The kids looked at their mum with disdain and disgust! "Did you really do this Mum!" Julie was already loosing her temper at the time and it was so for Jason. Helen apologized to the kids and promised them to Jeremy was safe and would be with them soon.
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This was so great as a letter was sent to the town where the maid moved in with her son Jeremy. He was needed in the castle as regarding the will's demand. This took a good long time. The letter was received and after about a week, he wrote back promising to be with them. This brought joy to the family, unending laughter filled the room on the promised day. Just like prodigal son, he was received with great joy. He looked so much like their father and with such handsome smile. The family reunion turned into a party at sight of Jeremy. This remained the talk of the city at the time...
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Well done with connecting Jeremy with the family but for the way you found him left the theme and end wanting a bit.
Regards to you sir, I appreciate your well structured review on my article. Im glad that my attempt was well appreciated. Thanks once again for stopping by...
Una mujer llena de celos e iras capaz de hacer cosas increíbles para salvar su matrimonio, pero perjudicando la vida de un pequeño inocente.
Que cosas tiene la vida.
Well said my dear friend, I appreciate your time and effort to read my article and drop really great feedback. Success on your writing journey on the platform