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RE: Wordsmiths Fiction Week 4: Season 24 – The Family Secret"
Hello @ngozi996, thank you so much for taking part in Week of the Steemit Challenge - Season 24! We truly appreciate the time and creativity you put into your entry. Your assessment, including feedback and scores based on our evaluation criteria, is provided below.
| Criteria | Marks |
|---|---|
| Story Setting & World-Building: No doubt you started on a good note but then you gave your story a turn towards uncle Kax that slowed down the buildup | 2.25/3 |
| Theme & Message: How did she reach straight away to the warehouse? How did she discover Jeremy? Why you missed the leading clue provided in the prompt? | 1.25/2 |
| Formatting & Presentation: It was okay | 1.25/2 |
| Originality & Uniqueness: To be frank, what could be a top class story turned to an ordinary one because you ignored the facts provided in the prompt. | 2/3 |
| Total | 6.75/10 |
Feedback
You can do better than this if you read the prompt carefully. My best regards!
Theme and message:
I want to believe you read this part sir/ma.
You asked us to take the story where our minds would go and I did just that. I also wrote that while she went in search of Jeremy at the warehouse, Jeremy came looking for her her. If that isn't a plot twist then, I don't know what is. The legitimate heir, suddenly realising they're not. Family secrets don't get deeper than that.
Please I'd ask that you review my write-up again and the assigned score @dove11 Thank you.
I read this part and this was the reason I made that remark. There was no address in the prompt so how did the protagonist headed to that address. PO BOX is a Post Office Box allotted to someone on rental basis who wish to receive his mail in post office for his personal reasons and his address is kept secret.
I hope you got your answer, thank you!
CC @waqarahmadshah