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RE: Steemit Challenge s26wk1 : The Office Project
Steemit Challenge Season 26 Week-1: The Office Project
Dear @memamun Here is the detailed assessment of your submission:
| Criteria | Marks | Remarks |
|---|---|---|
| Story start to finish | 4/5 | Okay |
| Originality & Uniqueness | 2.75/3 | |
| Presentation | 0.75/1 | |
| My observation | 0.75/1 | |
| Total | 8.25/10 |
- There are couple of contradictory facts in your story which distant it from real facts. For instance the pen that writes videos and a person suffering from SCID needs heart transplantation. What was the use of 12 lockers in the basement? How was the body of the director undetected for one year in a public place?
- Your story sounds more of a murder mystery rather than a team working on a project which brings glory to their company. I saw no conversation among the team members which was another missing point in the story. My best wishes for the contest.
Thank you very much for reviewing beautifully. However, I have kept the conversation brief; it should have been extended further. I will try to do better next time.
At the same time, I have answered some of your questions along with your comments. 👇👇
The girl who was affected by SCID disease here was the chairman's daughter; she donated her heart to another girl, and that girl was Dr. Amina, meaning the director who has died. There were various research papers, old photographs, and documents related to SCID in the 12 lockers, and so many lockers were used for safety. Since the director had secretly established a laboratory in the basement without anyone's knowledge, no one noticed it, and laboratories generally exist in quiet environments for focus and concentration. The director, being like the chairman's daughter, did not need any permissions for this; his research was for the betterment of the country, and this is why his dead body was there for so long; only the senior surgeon knew because he was the one who committed this murder.
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