Second chance romance

in #fiction-s26wk52 days ago (edited)

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Pulchritudinous morning it was. She woke up with excitement that this day she would achieve real happiness in her life. Jenny was excited to go to her office today to talk with her boyfriend about marriage.

The boy named Dennis is her boyfriend. Dapper, attractive, handsome, he is. Jenny always thought about him in her dreams, but had no courage to ask him for marriage, but this day she made up her mind that she had to talk to him. Her family is pushing her for marriage.

Dennis was beautiful despite having anger issues. He got very exhausted with little things. He achieved everything in his life after facing difficulties. He became a manager. Jenny and Dapper worked in the same office

That day, he received the news that the project he had to accomplish was moving towards failure.

He was thinking about what to do. The hyper-aggression he got.
On the other hand, Jenny was deciding what to wear. She opened all the wardrobes and spread the clothes. Pick up one dress to see in the mirror. This day it was difficult to select that

What to wear. The black one suits her, but the royal blue colour ahhh! It seems like this colour is made for her.
She wore high heels and a beautiful frock.
Got ready and went to the office.

Everyone was shocked and glared at her. She looked like a doll. When she was going to enter the room of Dennis her heartbeat was fast, the pounding of her heart.

However, she made her calm down and knocked on his room. Who is there? Dennis asks
Your lovely Jenny. Dennis asked her to enter.
He seems a bit weird today, she felt. She took courage and began to talk
Dennis, what happened?
He said nothing
Jenny: Ok, what about your lunch have you taken?
Dennis: Yeah, I had.

Jenny: I know something is disturbing you. Is there any problem you are facing? You seemed worried
Dennis: He remains quiet
Jenny: Ok, let it go, see what I wore. Your favorite colour is royal blue. I got ready for you

Dennis: He yelled at her What's your problem? Why are you trying to invade my privacy? Haven't you seen I'm not interested in talking to you
Jenny: Why are you disrespecting me? I always respect you, no matter what difficulties are going on in my life.
Dennis: Have I asked you to respect me or love me

Tears came to her eyes. Her heart broke. She was trembling. She left there by saying
" I came here to tell you I love you from my core of my heart. I gathered the courage and began to ask you Will you marry me?
You broke my feelings. Goodbye Dennis.

She said and left the room

Time flies in two years. Dennis was thinking about what I did to Jenny. He was sad because of his aggressive behavior. He groans.

Then his mother asked him to take her to the mall. They went to the mall. The Dennis was on the second floor. Suddenly, he saw Jenny on the first floor. He ran towards her.
He said loudly: Jenny!!!
Jenny stopped after listening to his voice. First, she became happy after listening to his voice, but then the flashback came to her mind. She began to walk.
Dennis ran after her. He came in front of her, blocking her way.
Jenny: I don't want to talk with you.
Dennis sat on his knees, saying I am sorry
Jenny: What are you doing?
Dennis: I will sit until or unless you give me a second chance.
Jenny: Please stand up, the crowd is seeing us.
Dennis: I don't care.
Jenny: Ok, let's talk first
Dennis: Stand up happily, and then they went to the coffee shop.
Jenny: Ok, say quickly, I have no time for you
Dennis: He began to cry, saying
Jenny, I am so sorry. I lost the diamond like you because of my aggressive behavior. But now I understand that we shouldn't shout on others when we have problems in our lives. Now I understand, I learned that we should be calm and tackle the situation instead of being sentimental.

Dennis accepted his mistakes, saying sorry. He met his mother through Jenny. Proposed to her, and then he got and won the second chance. The Dennis thanked ALLAH that the Jenny came to his life as a guidance. She made him realize that the things always went wrong in the anger. He corrected his mistakes . They got married and began to live happily.

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Steemit Challenge S26-w5 : Second chance romance

Dear @jiya99, here is the detailed assessment of your submission:

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.5/5Okay
Originality & Uniqueness2.9/3Okay
Presentation0.9/1Okay
My observation0.9/1Okay
Total9.2/10

Feedback

  • You started well and created a nice story but gave more important to Jenny.

  • What you missed is that the story happened immediately after they left Dennis' cabin but you carried it too far, two years to be precise.

Moderated by: @dove11

Oh ... Thanks for your feedback 😃

Creaste una escena de amor interesante. En efecto, en las relaciones debe existir el respeto hacia la pareja. Por lo menos, Dennis reconoció que su forma errada de hablar le pudo haber costado una relación con una persona que lo amaba de verdad. Buen trabajo. Suerte.

Thankuuuuu you guys are my inspiration ❤️🫂