Hello my dear friend, First of all, the beginning of the writing is quite cinematic, the way Dennis portrays his loneliness with “life looked flawless on paper” is captivating to the readers. The hustle and bustle of the city, the success of the office, the smiles outside, the loneliness hidden within it all felt very real.

Another great strength is Jenny’s character. You didn’t just bring her in as an old love, but as someone who has sorted out her life, is at peace, and doesn’t want to take the past back easily. This made the story more believable.