Steemit Challenge S26-w6 : Two-timing

in #fiction-s26wk64 days ago

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John was traveling from Sydney to Canberra by bus. He settled into his seat and looked casually at the side seat next to his, which wasn't occupied yet.

At that moment his phone rang. It was his wife, who asked if his journey from Delhi to Sydney was okay. When John was busy answering her call, he saw a beautiful girl in her mid-twenties come and sit beside him.

John hung up and smiled at the girl in the next seat. They started a conversation as soon as the bus started moving. Three hours passed talking on different topics, and they reached Canberra.

John was feeling a strange temptation. He was too anxious, and then it happened. When getting down from the bus, that girl Tina shook hands, slipped a card into his hand, and smiled...




When John was sitting and talking to her, a relationship was formed between them and this relationship became like a friendship, due to which Tina gave John her card

When John was talking to her and laughing and joking with her in different ways and when these three hours passed, their relationship started to deepen a lot because when a person talks to another person, after their relationship deepens, they give each other different types of cards or social media accounts to communicate with each other later, just like Tina gave him her card

Since John and Tina's relationship is very good and they have been talking to each other for a long time, they have developed a very good relationship and they have started to feel a lot of weakness towards each other and since John is feeling a little weak towards Tina, he does not want to miss the opportunity

So his next step is that he will talk to Tina according to the number given on the card and after talking to her, he went to a place to meet her and they spent some time there again and they He started spending time

Later, when his wife calls him repeatedly, he looks busy and does not want to talk to his wife. He only talks to Tina and through talking to her, he starts to feel a special attraction to her, which he did not like when talking to his wife, so now he only talks to Tina

When they go to a restaurant, they spend their time there in a very nice and quiet environment and they talk there very nicely and whenever John's wife calls him, he hangs up the call or if he calls repeatedly, he hangs up the call after talking for a few minutes. He says that he is very busy with his work, but he only shows his busyness by spending time with Tina.

Since John has moved forward a lot and has built a very good relationship with her through talking to her, now he does not want to miss that opportunity. He wants to get into a deep relationship with Tina and he is with Tina. I want to get into a relationship so well that he doesn't even think about proposing to her

But John had forgotten that he had a wife and at the same time Tina had forgotten that she had a husband who was much better because of him. Now if she goes into a relationship with John or if she gets married to him, what will she answer her husband and at the same time what will John answer his wife, these two things come to their minds

Then they both realize their own mistakes. They don't limit their acquaintance only to their friendship and both call their husbands and wives. Tina calls her husband and starts talking to him like before and now talks more beautifully than before. At the same time, John talks to his wife and listens to whatever his wife needs and John listens to her needs very well.

But John's wife was very suspicious because her husband was very good and always talked to him. Now why has he suddenly changed like this after traveling when he treated her well? When asked, Jan tells the truth and after hearing John's true story, his wife gets very angry and starts doubting his character.

However, after Jan understands his mistake, his wife apologizes to him and says that if he wanted, he could have done something bad to her and married her, he could have done many things at the same time, but he did not go that wrong path only because he loved his wife.

When he returned to his wife, after explaining it very well, his wife accepts him and his relationship with his wife starts progressing very well again and his wife tells him that he should never look at any girl outside, let alone talk.

Finally, here comes the moment when John and Tina's relationship is formed, but they did not form that relationship, they both understood their mistakes and they both returned to the people they love. Meanwhile, after John returned to his beloved wife, his wife accepted him and at the same time Tina returned to her husband again, but in this case, the biggest result is the victory of love. Here they truly love each other. They didn't go astray because they stayed with their own true loved ones.

I invite here my friends to join

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I am Abdullah Al Saimoon from Bangladesh. My nickname is 𝓑𝓘𝓙𝓞𝓨. I am a student. I am the regular user and post maker in this platform. I love share my regular activities in this platform. I am a resident of Daganbhuiyan upazila of Feni district. See details about me on Google There are my social media accounts YouTube , Tiktok, Twitter, Facebook, Instagram . I am ethnically Muslim. I am a biker and a bike lover. I've been riding bikes many times. I went out in many places with bike.

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Steemit Challenge S26-w6 : Two-timing

Dear @bijoy1, here is the detailed assessment of your submission:

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.5/5Okay
Originality & Uniqueness3/3Good
Presentation1/1Good
My observation0.8/1Fair
Total9.3/10

Feedback

  • Your theme was good but you kept repeating the basics and John never reached to the conclusion.

  • Your story missed the thrill, romance and fiction besides the conversation which is lifeline of this niche.

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Thanks for telling.