Dear @sabbirakib, below is the detailed assessment of your submission.
| Criteria | Marks | Remarks |
|---|---|---|
| Story start to finish | 4.65/5 | Good |
| Originality & Uniqueness | 2.9/3 | Good |
| Presentation | 0.9/1 | Good |
| My observation | 0.85/1 | You expanded the story far beyond Canberra. |
| Total | 9.3/10 |
Feedback
- I could see John’s temptation grow from an innocent bus ride encounter to something that shattered his marriage but the transition from the bus journey to "months later" felt a little rushed. I wish you lingered more on John's immediate feelings after Tina slipped him the card because that's where the original narrative wanted us to focus first.