"Wordsmiths Fiction Week 3: Season 24 – The Last Photo"

in #fiction-s24wk33 months ago

Hello, everyone, good morning and welcome to my post in which I wrote the continuation of "the last Photo"

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The Continuation

The discovery of Nadeesha's Camera sparks lots of reactions. The Crew kept on analysing the Photo, everything about the Picture looked strange, the Wooden hut looks weird, even the tall figure faced looks blurry in the Picture.

At that point, the searching crew was Confused on the next step to take. They were so many unanswered questions at that point. "Where could this be?" "Have anything happened to Nadeesha?" This and so many unanswered questions ran through their mind. The searching crew decided to go further into the forest. They were divided into group of twos inorder to make the search easier. After searching for an hour without Success, the Crew went back to the Village.

The news about Nadeesha's disappearance spread through out the village like a Wildfire, it was on the lips of every Villager. Some pitied her and wished for her safe return, while others blamed her for taking such dangerous adventure. Some also attributed her disappearance to an old Myth about a Evil River inside the Forest that kills a Villager every year.

Nadeesha's family really felt the impact of her disappearance, everyday, towards dusk, they always look to the Entrance door to know if she will return back. After a week, Nadeesha's brother couldn't take it anyone, he said thus: "I'm going," "going where" asked his mom. He told his parents that he was going to look for his sister but they refused.

They didn't want to lose him too. Nadeesha's dad organized another search crew to venture into the Forest and search for Nadeesha again. This time around, Nadeesha's brother went with them.

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After a while, one of the Crew members decided to look around to see if he could find a River to fetch drinking water because their water was almost exhausted. Two people from the Crew were asked to accompany him inorder to avoid him missing his way.

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They trekked for about 30 minutes before they could see the River. On getting to the River, they drank water and filled their water cans. As they were about to go, one of them saw a fruit tree at the other side of the River and he signalled others to it. They were very happy and they turned to the other side of the River. On getting there, they discovered a narrow path and they saw footprints.

They were curious, and they decided to satisfy their curiosity so they followed the footprint. They kept moving deeper and deeper into the forest until alas they was the Hut exactly as it was in the picture. On going inside, they saw Nadeesha's Camera bag but couldn't find her.

The hut looked like no one have lived there in Years. After searching for a while they decided to leave, on their way going out, one of them heard a faint voice and he alerted others. They began to search the Compound. Lo and behold, they saw her at a corner where clothes was heaped looking confused and tired. "Where have you been Nadeesha?" One of them shouted but she was too tired to talk.

After a while, she muttered some words saying "as I was taking pictures, I saw a tall figure and after he spoke to me, I couldn't control what was happening to me, all I remembered was that he brought me here. He didn't harm me but I can't remember anything." They took her back to meet with the remaining Crew members.

Her brother rushed and embraced her when he saw her. She told her brother the same story she told the people who rescued her but they were very confused, because such has not happened before. As they escorted her back to her Parents, every one of them was deep in their own thoughts. They believed that they was more to the Story.

I invite @edu-chemist, @akareen and @aspiya to participate in this contest.

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Saludos amiga una historia muy misteriosa nadie supo cómo llego Nadeesha hasta ese lugar porque ni ella misma lo recordaba por suerte lograron descubrir el lugar donde estaba porque de lo contrario la historia de los desaparecidos hubiese continuado con ella
Mucha suerte en tu participación

If such an appearance could happen in reality, there are many I would want to bring back to life. Thanks so much for the mention. Expect my entry soon


Hello @rossnenye, thank you so much for taking part in Week-3 of the Steemit Challenge - Season 24! We truly appreciate the time and creativity you put into your entry. Your assessment, including feedback and scores based on our evaluation criteria, is provided below.

CriteriaMarks
Story Setting & Word-Building: You have done well at this point when you say Crew members decided to look around to see if he could find a River to fetch drinking water because their water was almost exhausted.2/3
Theme & Message: I think you could have added a little suspense at this point before they found her in the compound.1.5/2
Formatting & Presentation:1.75/2
Originality & Uniqueness: I missed a little originality at this point but it was on expected lines.2.25/3
Total7.5/10

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Thanks for your review.

Creaste una atmósfera de tensión interesante. Pero sientoq ue te apuraste un poco para cerrar el texto. Es decir, creo que tal vez pudiste explicar cómo eran las manos o la voz de la figura conla que tuvo contacto.

Me encantó leerte. Suerte.

Wow, what a gripping story. The way you've painted the scene, with the wildfire of the news and the family's heartbreak, is really effective. I especially felt the brother's determination and the father's resolve. The suspense of the search and the mystery of the forest are really drawing me in.

Wow, thank you so much for reading my Story.