Second Chance Romance

in #fiction-s26wk519 days ago

Standing at the floor-to-ceiling windows of his elevated office, Dennis gazed out at the city horizon. His life appeared excellent and delightful - a prominent corporate manager with all the facilities, a stylish house in the city's center, and a well-regarded personality in society. He had accomplished everything through determination and diligence. Nevertheless, just below the surface, Dennis felt an unusual loneliness, a weight he found difficult to shake off.

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As he mulled over his past, Dennis's mind drifted back to his moment with Jenny, his colleague and girlfriend. He recalled the day they had a very agitated argument in his office. That evening, Janny had come to his cabin, and they had discussed personal life and work. However, their dialogue rapidly became sour, and each, angry and hurt, walked out of the office.

The contention had been about Denny's rising concentration on his career, which Janny felt was stifling their relationship. Dennis, obsessed with ambition, had put his job over their feelings. The dispute came to an end with Jenny raging out, leaving Dennis with feelings of guilt and regret.

Years had elapsed since then, yet the memory of that dispute kept ringing. Dennis's success had not brought him the felicity he thought it would. He felt lonesome, tired, and encumbered with the heaviness of his past mistakes.

One fateful day, Dennis made up his mind to reach out to Jenny, believing to expiate and discover or gain closure. He sent her a message, and to his greatest amazement, she agreed to meet him.

They met at a serene café, both anxious and uncertain of what to anticipate. Dennis sincerely expressed regret and made an apology for his past mistakes, admitting that he had put his career over their relationship. Jenny paid attention, her expression getting softer as she observed the sterling remorse in Dennis's eyes.

"I was infantile and nonsensical, and was unaware of what I had until it was quite late. I'm sorry for hurting you"

Said Dennis,

Jenny, nodded with her eyes teary. "I loved you, Dennis. But I merited more than being second-best."

As they discussed, it dawned on Dennis and Jenny that their relationship had been an endwork of time. They had been childish, ambitious, and uncertain of what they wanted. Meanwhile, at this point, they saw one another from a different point of view.

Dennis:

"I have carried this guilt for years, I'm happy we could discuss it"

Jenny:

"Likewise me. I have moved on, though it is pleasant to know you are doing well"

Their discussion brought closure to both of them. It dawned on Dennis that genuine happiness comes from within and from fostering meaningful relationships. He started prioritizing his personal life, reuniting with family and friends.

As Dennis walked out of the café, he felt a big relief, a weight lifted off his shoulders. He realized that he invariably had a long way to go; nevertheless, he was appreciative of the privilege to expiate and be taught by his past. The city horizon appeared brighter, and he felt a sense of renewal and hope. Dennis's story was not about accomplishing perfection but discovering equilibrium, forgiveness, as well as understanding.

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Steemit Challenge Season 26 Week-5: Second Chance Romance

Dear @hisgeneral, below is the detailed assessment of your submission.

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.5/5Good
Originality & Uniqueness2/3Satisfactory
Presentation0.9/1Good
My observation0.85/1Mid-level effort, but not memorable.
Total8.25/10

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  • You summarized the flashback argument instead of showing it through dialogue and actions. That made the conflict feel less dramatic and less engaging.

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