Steemit Challenge S26-w5 : Second chance romance

The city at night was strangely quiet. Only tall buildings around, the city streets sparkling with blue-yellow lights, people busy all around, even though everything was visible, an invisible emptiness always filled Dennis's mind.
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In the outside world, Dennis was a symbol of success. A high-level job in a large company, his own house in the middle of the city, and a glimpse of an expensive car-all seemed to show the glory of their lives. But behind this glitter was an invisible weariness. An emptiness that had built up inside him every day was slowly eating him from the inside, which no one could understand.

Hidden deep in this loneliness was a name that was not forgotten, Jenny. She was his office colleague, you could say his ex-girlfriend, with whom he shared the walls of the office cabin every day, and whose smile once illuminated his life.

Dennis remembers that evening clearly; their simple talk suddenly turned into a sharp fight. In a moment, their long relationship fell apart. That day, Jenny left the office with tears in her eyes, and Dennis, though feeling sad inside, stayed silent. He never thought the person he loved the most would walk away upset. And that silence was what ended it all.

Years passed. Even though Dennis climbed the ladder of success one by one, he could never erase Jenny from his mind. Every day, when he returned home alone after work, or on tired nights, that last conversation would suddenly surface. He would think again and again, if only he had been a little more patient that day…if only he had tried to convince her…this regret seemed to have become a constant companion of his life, chasing him back every day, every moment.

Finally, one day, news came that Jenny had returned to the city. At that moment, a strange stirring occurred in Dennis's mind. Then the fear and hope in his mind mixed. Then he kept wondering, is this the long-awaited second chance? Or will he fail again, like in the past? He kept thinking like this for a long time.

After a few days of hesitation, Dennis finally went to their old favorite cafe. It seemed that Jenny had definitely not forgotten this place. He knew--even though it was small, the place was the most intimate for both of them.

The morning light was coming in through the glass windows. The smell of coffee was spreading everywhere. As soon as Dennis entered, he suddenly stopped. Jenny was sitting in front of him.

Time has changed a lot. There has been a slight change in the face. Yet the inner firmness, that familiar glow in the eyes, remains as before. A kind of peace was shining in her eyes, but Dennis realised- behind that peace, there was hidden the pain of many years.

  • Dennis stepped forward. He called out in a trembling voice,

  • Jenny…

  • Then Jenny slowly looked at him. There was no intensity in his voice, only a strange calm tone. He answered in that calm tone,

  • Dennis

After that, both of them were completely silent for the first few moments. Then, the silence between the two of them seemed to express thousands of words stored inside them. Finally, Dennis dared to say,

I still regret that day. I lost you because of my anger and pride, because I thought being strong meant victory. But in fact, I only lost you.

  • Jenny looked deeply into her eyes. After a while, he said softly,

  • Do you think I was not harmed? I blamed myself again and again. If I had a little more patience that day, we might not be separated for so many years.

After these words, the distance between the two of them decreased somewhat after many years. Then they started talking openly about their feelings. The discussion about past mistakes, sorrows, and misunderstandings continued for a long time. With each sentence, it was as if the old walls were crumbling.

  • Dennis said,

  • Without my success, emptiness is only called you. I do not want the second chance to be ruined.

  • Jenny thought for a while and said,

  • We can start again, but this time without any masks. Like real life, where we can also accept each other's mistakes.

  • Then Dennis smiled after a long time, completely sincerely.
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    As Dennis & Jenny looked out the window of the cafe, the dawn was slowly spreading. It seemed like not only was a new day beginning... maybe something new was about to begin in their lives as well. The path ahead--maybe it would be one of forgiveness, understanding, and a little love.

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This story carries a lot of emotions, I like how you that behind all of Dennis' success, he was still feeling empty on the inside. The part with Jenny touched me, because not many of us get to say sorry until it's too late. And finally, the ending brought a small glint of hope, and that sometimes life gives us second chance of we grab it.

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Dear @mamun123456, below is the detailed assessment of your submission.

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.8/5Excellent
Originality & Uniqueness2.9/3Good
Presentation0.9/1Good
My observation0.85/1The emotional core was there, but you didn't take risks to elevate the story.
Total9.45/10

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  • You wrote a heartfelt and relatable story that matches the theme well but you repeated Dennis's loneliness and regret several times. Instead of deepening his character, it felt like the same thought circling back.

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