It's a sad story, but at the same time brilliant, because you manage to make the ending unexpected and, as always, with your personal touch. I see that either love or death are linked in your work. It's not bad to write about one or the other or both, as is the case here. Keep writing.
Thank you very much for reading my writing. I appreciate your critique and also your opinion that I keep writing even if you don't like my personal touch regarding love very much.