I liked it a bunch. It was very idealistic and a bit fast for me. The last sentence kinda ruined it for me, I would have liked how they got there vs just the result.

Def want to read more.

I can tell this is written by a women, there are a lot of female fantasies in this story especially how girls like to see themselves. Nothing wrong with it but it made me giggle inside.

Unfortunately my vote at this point is only worth 6 cent.

I think u have potential, but I don't know what I am talking about, I usually don't read things like this. U could hook me though.