Steemit Challenge s26wk2- Mysterious Roommate

in #pakistan5 hours ago (edited)

Assalam Alikaum :

Hi everyone This is me M.Abdullah .Today after a long time is here to participate in a contest which is about writing a story .I have come after a long time because my old account @abdullah79 was hacked and the hacker started powerdown of my 111 steems and also in that account my reputation was approximately 60 .

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A Mysterious Roomate :

At start Timothy was thinking that the Ronnie the roomate is an decent boy but later on felt that he is an agent or any bad character because he judged him from his tools .Once Timothy and Ronnie has booked a car for their trip because Ronnie worked for much time and was little bit mentally disturbed and Timothy was also tired .So , they both went to a trip to a natural places of there country like mountainoues arean for a trip but on the way two people was chasing them but when two men and both roomates came out from their cars .Then Ronnie immediately shooted them and when Timothy asked him that why you killed them them ronnied told him that I will tell you later .This is not the right time .Then both the Roomates went back to their house by the booked car .After this all Timothy was more suspecious about Ronnie then Ronnie continued his import export bussiness .Then once 5 men get into their house and started finding Ronnie but Ronnie was hiding from then and when he got a chance then he killed them from back.Timothy was also at house so he all saw this all situation .So ,now he was scaring from ronnie and was thinking that surel he is an bad man.Then Timothy ecretely call the police but when police reached Then as Ronnie hear police searan he ran and got away for that house and then police was failed in finding him .But once he call Tomithy and asks him that could you come to a specific place which i will tell you then Timothy went their but also for security their was police officers which are hiding .So, when Timothy reached their then Ronnie told him the story that this was a big group of criminal who killed my parents and now trying to kill me but I am hiding fron them but they can find me .So I am doing my safety as well as I am taking revenge of my parents .Then suddently police officers came and captured him then police officers lock him in jail but after some hours Timothy realise his mistake and was very much sad and also was crying for his cheap behaviour that he was killing those people because they messed with him .So Timothy went to police station and said that I had some understanding in investigating the right person.Then police officers open the jail and said to Ronnie that you are now free.Than Ronni and Timothy huged and Timothy was crying and was saying sorry to Ronnir for his behaviour for juding your behavour and was not hearing te story that why you are doing that /Then they both went to their house and then then team up with their friends and then they all went to theGangs place and then his friends camees and then all criminal ran behing them and when the boss were with no one then Ronnie andTimothy turtored him and Then Police arested all gang member including the boss then after court the boss was to be killed but Ronnie forgived him and said that forgiving is the best virtue then the boss felt sad for his behavior then he told to Ronnie that I am Soory and Your parents are not dead but they are kept in our secret place then the boss free his parent and then his parents was happy as well as Ronnie and Gang Boss was also happy .Then Ronnie contined his export import bussiness and the gang boss started an legal job and Ronnie was living as a Roomate with Timothy and his parents was living in a house in other city which was given by the boss for forgiving him.

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Thats All :

Thats All I hope that you all like my story now i am inviting some of my frinds to visit my post and also inviting the curator of the challenge .Lets hope for the best.



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Steemit Challenge S26-w2 : Mysterious Roommate

Dear @ , here is the detailed assessment of your submission:

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish2/5-
Originality & Uniqueness1/3-
Presentation0.5/1-
My observation0.3/1-
Total3.8/10

Feedback

  • If your account was hacked you should have mentioned it in your intro post.

  • Your story does not qualify as a serious contribution for this contest.

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