You got nice lines there but it does not look much of a poetry. You could have broken those lines of sentences into smaller lines so it will take the form of a phrase.
You got nice lines there but it does not look much of a poetry. You could have broken those lines of sentences into smaller lines so it will take the form of a phrase.
Thank you for reading and liking some lines. I know it might not look much like poetry--I do both, write the kind of poems you're thinking of and also write vignettes of life. I often don't know what to call my writing, but do know when I go to local writing groups, mine are an amalgamation of all the forms. I have at times called it flash fiction, but mostly they're based on my life, so that doesn't seem fitting. I guess I'm like a painter who is incorporating both abstract and realism in one piece.
So, I'll probably just keep doing what I'm doing and hope I don't offend anyone by calling my work poetry because I really do feel it lies closest to this form.
Cheers!
You don't offend anyone at all. I acknowledge your works and writing. I am only trying to point out the beauty that accomplishes reading of poetry is rhythmical lines.
Good works dear @kimberlylane