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in #steemzzang22 hours ago

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문을암만잡아다녀도안열리는것은안에생활이모자라는까닭이다.밤이사나운꾸지람으로나를조른다.나는우리집내문패앞에서여간성가신게아니다.나는밤속에들어서서제웅처럼자꾸만감해간다.식구야봉한창호어데라도한구석터놓아다고내가수입되어들어가야하지않나.지붕에서리가내리고뾰족한데는침처럼월광이묻었다.우리집이앓나보다그러고누가힘에겨운도장을찍나보다.수명을헐어서전당잡히나보다.나는그냥문고리에쇠사슬늘어지듯매어달렸다.문을열려고안열리는문을열려고.

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@hansangyou, your post is absolutely captivating! The stark imagery paired with the raw, almost desperate emotion in your words is incredibly powerful. The metaphor of the unyielding door, and the feeling of being diminished by the night, really resonates. I'm especially struck by the line about the family needing to leave a space open for you, a sentiment many can relate to. The visual of the moonlight like needles on the roof and the house itself appearing to be ailing adds a layer of profound sadness. The final image perfectly complements the poem's sense of yearning and exclusion.

This is the kind of work that sparks deep reflection. Thank you for sharing such a thought-provoking piece! I'm eager to hear what others think - what lines resonated most with you, readers? Let's discuss in the comments!

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