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RE: The Known Future – Oivas’ Entry
Hello @bananafish, I do not intend to participate in the last contest. I was late and would be unfair to other participants. I just put it out since the story was ready. 😊
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It is late, but we have always accepted late entries in Tell A Story, and I am so glad you made it! You have a disadvantage in the voting for being late, as some votes were already cast, so in that sense it levels the playing field ;) and I am so happy I got to read it anyway <3
I love how you just give me such a different setting and perspective in each round. Telling this through the eyes of youth learning eagerly is such a wonderful mechanism to convey the story, you provide so much information without the reader feeling like they have slipped out of show and into tell. I love the word! Intudictors, a brilliant little detail. The premise, this machine predicting the future based on how strongly someone believes it will come into fruition and peoples acceptance of that. There is a wonderful element in here about the wisdom of youth, and new eyes, and how something can be overlooked by those who are wading through the details every day, and seem so obvious to someone from the outside. It gives the story a deeper level, becoming a story about perseverance. I really love that you keep it in prompt, and the characters find a better way to make the most of the predictions without being ruled by them. The idea that the future is in a constant state of flux, that people can both know it and change it is a brilliant way to end this, and of course with war averted. I love your final paragraph, bringing it back round. This is a wonderfully complete story, it was a pleasure to read. Thank you <3
Hey @bananafish, thank you for going through the post, although I made it a point not to submit it.. But thanks again! 😊
Glad you enjoyed the story.
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I did realize, (although you've blown my tag monitoring for entries secret ;) lol) and I didn't count it on the main judging, but it was such a pleasure to read, and I was struck with a few thoughts about it over the last week, how could I not leave a comment! <3
Ahhh, thank you my dearest @bananafish!! :) :)
Hugs and kisses and much much more... (did I go overboard?)